OK so today we got on a call and decided, the general story as we have it is kind of bland.
The most prominent issue being the fact that nothing really makes our audience care about our main character. In the film she goes through a physical struggle, but none of that struggle really makes anyone root for her. SOO we decided to tweak the original idea!
After some discussion we came to this: instead of anything along the lines of what we were thinking before which would've been a malicious spell steals claires life force, and she needs to find a way to stop or counter it, we decided it would be much more intriguing if the witches actually were welcoming her in to their squad. We decided the main conflict of the story should be something that tests her need to fit in. A placeholder example we used for this was the 3 witches ask her to help them bury a dead body. This creates a more inner conflict within her: should she help the witches and finally fit in to a group, or should she do what she knows is right and stay alone.
I think this change definitely fixes the issues with attachment to the main character because it creates a more personal aspect that can make an audience really connect to the character.
So this is the point at which we have the script right now (just one page longer than last time) and I will update once we've written out our new idea!
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